A Man Called Horse...
The Hanging Ceremony To Reach Out To Great Spirit...

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histoire super mais juste un petit bemol, c'est la musique de fond elle gâche un peu l'ambiance mais sinon c'est passionnant

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You have some very good beginnings of stories in this video but especially in the 1st 5 of them the story stopped abruptly & left everything kind of spinning in the void. By that I mean there was no resolution. Resolution does NOT necessarily answer all the questions a reader has but it needs to tie the rest of the story together. For example, I don't need to know whether the entity creating the chaos is a man or a monster but I do need to have enough info to make my own decision about it. Also, I'd love to see you really lean n2 developing your characters more. Make them as complete as possible. Not just how they look but tell me a little bit about how they live. Like, say there's a gum chewing deputy, he's all arrogance & swagger. And he chews gum endlessly, not just chewing but smacking, popping, blowing bubbles. And he knows for sure it annoys ppl but he enjoys the fact others are bothered but can't do anything about it
b/c he's the law. This guy is a real piece of work....right up until he gets a sudden face to face with the entity and he's so scared he swallows that gum, nearly chokes on it. Who has the power now?
Sorry for the long comment. I love writers (am one myself) & I love encouraging other writers. I got lucky & was able to go back to college, graduating in 2006 w/ my degree in English & Creative Writing. Anywho, this isn't about me, I just wanted you to know I'm not some hypercritical internet jackass who hasn't a clue what she's saying. I think you have a fabulous writing future ahead of you. So hang in there. Don't give up!
Happy Writing

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